I love strolling the neighborhood at dusk, seeing inside the well-lit houses I pass without the occupants seeing me. There’s a family sitting around a dining table. A teenage boy wearing earphones, dancing in a living room. An old woman watching the weatherman on television. I see framed photographs on a pinewood dresser; an iron bed pushed up against a window that’s steamy from the chorizos frying on the stove; a lacy curtain turned gray. Glimpses of lives being lived.
Rooms reveal something about the people who live within. Are the walls bare and painted a peach hue, or adobe white, cluttered with photographs? Are the furnishings leather and chrome, cast-offs from the flea market, or Scandinavian minimalist? And the house itself, is it battleship gray, sunny yellow, or dull as mud? Is the yard mowed or overgrown, fenced, or unfenced with flagstones leading to the front door? Did someone plant tulips along the walkway, or vegetables in wooden boxes? Is there a sign on the gate: Beware of Dog, or does a cat slumber on a window sill?
On my evening walks, I view the world through the lens of a writer. I yearn for a home of my own, to be sharing a meal with family. I empathize with the woman alone in front of the TV–could that be me in twenty years? Wait, don’t close the curtains, I’m not done looking.
I spy on people.
It’s not what I do in life, but it’s something I do.
What do you do?
When meeting someone for the first time, we’re often asked: “What do you do?” Leil Lowndes, the author of How to Talk to Anyone: 92 Little Tricks for Big Success in Relationships, suggests phrasing your answer in a way that says: “Here’s how my life can benefit yours.” She gives these examples:
Instead of real estate agent, say: “I help people moving into our area find the right home.”
Instead of hairdresser: “I help a woman find the right hairstyle for her particular face.”
Instead of financial planner: “I help people plan their financial future.”
What about fiction writers? How does our work benefit the lives of others?
Here’s an answer:
As readers, aren’t we spying on imaginary people? We peer into their lives, listen in on their thoughts, watch their most intimate moments, shadow them through their days. We part the curtains of a book, and lose ourselves in the lives of the characters within. By observing how they think through their problems, and what actions they take to overcome obstacles, we learn to navigate the real world.
As writers, how do we help readers satisfy that itch to spy? Here are three tips, with exercises to practice:
1. Engage the reader through their senses
By choosing a few specific sensory details that describe person, place, and thing, the better the reader can “see” the world they’ve entered. In other words: show, don’t tell. He isn’t mad at his wife; he stiffens his shoulders, sets his jaw, and slams out the door. She isn’t trying to get the boy’s attention at school; she’s tapping her pencil against her binder, reaching out one toe and nudging his calf. The car isn’t old and messy; there’s dog hair on the upholstery, McDonald’s wrappers on the floor. The radio sputters between a Spanish station and Big Band music, and the air smells like French Fries.
Don’t overload the reader’s senses (something I need to watch out for in my own work); allow room for the reader to engage their own imaginations.
Practice: Write a scene using sensory details only.
2. Let the reader in on the character’s thought process
Readers don’t want the kind of detail provided on Facebook—this is what I’m having for dinner—unless that’s crucial to a scene. If a character’s inner monologue doesn’t move the story along or reveal something about the thinker, it doesn’t belong.
Readers want to know what’s going on behind a character’s facade. What is the character wrestling with? How do they sort through options? How do they deal with depression, anxiety, or fear? How do they really feel?
Practice: Write the inner monologue of a nervous man or woman getting ready for a date. Why is this person nervous?
3. Hold the reader’s interest through conflict
Why do we tune into bad news on television? Why, when driving past an accident, do we slow down to look? Why do we gossip? Why do we watch someone on YouTube get slammed in the crotch by a baseball? We want to see the reaction to whatever horrible thing has happened. We want to see how people survive, how they handle getting knocked down, how they band together, how they process bad news. We want to see how rotten life can get for someone else, and how, against all odds, that person rises up. It makes our own lives seem better.
Practice: Write a scene where something bad happens to a character. Use action, dialogue, and inner monologue to show the character’s reaction, and how they fight to overcome the obstacle. Include a few sensory details to bring the scene to life.
Remember: outside the window of every work of fiction, there’s a reader peering in. It’s up to writers to open the curtains wide.
I used to hate the question “what do you do?” You have to have a well paying job or fancy career to be able to comfortably answer that question.
I know how you feel. But any work is valuable. And now you have a line you can use. I help (fill in the blank) do (fill in the blank).
Diane, I like this! I’ve not thought about writing from that exact perspective. I’ve heard we read so we don’t feel alone; it makes sense then, that writers are the “curtain pullers.” Thank you!
Glad it gave you a new perspective!
A helpful post. Well-written, but I found describing a house as ‘the color of turds’ a bit vulgar. It may be just me, but I found it jarring with the rest of the piece. Unless you want to throw a curveball in there!
Good point. It does sort of thud, doesn’t it. I could edit it, but then your comment wouldn’t make sense. Or I could explain… hey readers, I’ve removed the above-mentioned turds.
This brings to mind a good test for rewriting and editing: you know you’re done, when you’ve made it worse than the time before. Ha!
Excellent advice–I wish I was still in the classroom so that I could share this with my students!
Thanks! Glad you found it educational.
I hate that question but I love your answer. Love. I’m using it. 🙂
Have at it.
That’s a fun way to put it, Diane. It is kind of true, though. I guess you could say it’s like spying on other people without any negative consequences.